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不會再後退 也不能再挽回 bu hui zai hou tui ye bu neng zai wan hui Can’t retreat again, and can’t regain it either Không thể nào lùi lại nữa, và không thể nào vãn hồi được nữa 我們之間的一切讓我的心殘廢 wo men zhi jian de yi qie rang wo de xin can fei Our whole relationship has caused my heart to become deformed Quan hệ giữa chúng ta đã làm cho trái tim tôi tàn phế đi 要多少智慧 才能夠無所謂 yao duo shao zhi hui cai neng gou wu suo wei How much intelligence must be acquired to feel indifference? Bao nhiêu trí tuệ mới có thể trở nên lãnh đạm được? 倒不如給幸福多一次機會 dao bu ru gei xing fu duo yi ci ji hui How about giving happiness another chance? Chi bằng hãy cho hạnh phúc thêm một cơ hội nữa
我不想難過 你選擇了沉默 wo bu xiang nan guo ni xuan xe le chen mo I don’t want to be sad, you’ve chosen silence Tôi không muốn đau buồn, em đã chọn yên lặng 我們笑 把感傷輕輕帶過 wo men xiao ba gan shang qing qing dai guo We smile, taking sadness lightly and bearing it Chúng ta mỉm cười, nhẹ nhàng nắm lấy đau thương và cứ chịu đựng 如果能夠重新來過 ru guo neng gou chong xin lai guo If it’s possible to start over Nếu có thể làm lại từ đầu 我們有沒有把握 wo men you mei you ba wo Should we seize it? Chúng ta có nên bắt lấy cơ hội không?
只是放開這樣的你並不容易 zhi shi fang kai zhe yang de ni bing bu rong yi Separating just like that wasn’t easy Chia tay như vậy không dễ dàng chút nào 為何這一切已註定 wei he zhe yi qie yi zhu ding Why was it already destined to be that way? Tại sao số mệnh lại đã sắp đặt sẵn rồi? 不爭氣這對你著迷的心 bu zheng qi zhe dui ni zhe mi de xin Disappointed that I’ve been captivated by you Thất vọng vì tôi đã bị em mê hoặc 留下難堪的自己 liu xia nan kan de zi ji Leaving behind an intolerable self Để lại cho bản thân không thể nào chịu nổi 相信我會痊癒 xiang xin wo hui quan yu I believe that I could heal completely Tôi tin rằng tôi có thể hồi phục được
原來這場戰役我輸得最徹底 yuan lai zhe chang zhan yi wo shu de zui che di So in this battlefield, I’ve lost completely Hóa ra, tại chiến trường này, tôi đã bị thua một cách tuyệt đối 勝利的你卻不屑的走下去 sheng li de ni que bu xie de zou xia qu Yet you, the victor, disdainfully keep going Nhưng người thắng lợi là em lại khinh thường nó mà tiếp tục bước đi 留下無法磨滅的回憶 liu xia wu fa mo mie de hui yi Leaving behind memories that are impossible to obliterate Để lại những kỷ niệm mà không thể nào xóa nhòa được 愛你勝過自己 ai ni sheng guo zi ji I love you more than I love myself Tôi yêu em còn hơn yêu chính bản thân mình
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嬉笑 打鬧 擁抱 xi xiao da nao yong bao Laughters, ruptures, embraces Vui đùa, cãi lộn, ôm nhau 留下了那麼多開心合照 liu xia le na me duo kai xin he zhao Remaining in a lot of our joyous photos Những thứ đó còn lại trong mấy tấm hình vui nhộn của chúng ta 互相 取暖 依靠 hu xiang qu nuan yi kao Warming and relying on each other Sưởi ấm cho nhau và nương tựa lẫn nhau 熬過了最低潮 ao guo le zui di chao Enduring the toughest times Chịu đựng những chuỗi ngày khó khăn nhứt
一起生活 也一起埋怨過 yi qi sheng huo ye yi qi man yuan guo Living together and also blaming one another Cùng nhau sinh hoạt và cũng đã từng oán trách đối phương 走過最好與最糟 zou guo zui hao zu zui zao Going through the best and worst of times Trải qua những ngày tươi đẹp nhứt và những ngày tệ nhứt 我在心裡想的不用說的 wo zai xin li xiang de bu yong shuo de In my heart, I’m thinking of what couldn’t be said Lòng tôi đang nghĩ tới những điều không nên nói ra 你知道 ni zhi dao Do you know? Em có biết không?
晨昏 日夜 顛倒 chen hun ri ye dian dao Sunrise and sunset, day and night, all reversed Sớm chiều, ngày đêm, đều đã đảo lộn 這房子突然沒從前熱鬧 zhe fang zi tu ran mei cong qian re nao This room suddenly no longer contains the liveliness of the past Căn phòng này đột nhiên đã không còn náo nhiệt như xưa 散落 一地 微笑 san luo yi di wei xiao Scattering, a single space, those smiles Tản lạc, một nơi nào đó, những nụ cười 沒有人去打掃 mei you ren qu da sao No one could sweep it up Không ai có thể thu dọn được
感情很微妙 再多付出也好 gan qing hen wei miao zai duo fu chu ye hao Love is very subtle, it’s all right to put in even more effort Cảm tình rất là tế nhị, trao ra nhiều hơn cũng tốt 再多關心都徒勞 zai duo guan xin dou tu lao Caring a little more would just be useless Quan tâm nhiều hơn cũng bằng không 愛從來就沒有固定的軌道 ai cong lai jiu mei you gu ding de gui dao There isn’t a fixed set of rules in regards to love Tình yêu xưa nay đều không có một định luật rõ ràng 他最後停在那裡誰知道 ta zui hou ting zai na li shui zhi dao No one would know of its final destination Cũng không ai biết được cuối cùng nó lại ngừng ở đâu
我的難過是如此低調 wo de nan guo shi ru ci di diao My sorrowfulness would just be subdued Nỗi đau buồn của tôi cũng sẽ bị dằn lại 因為不想打擾 我在寂寞的牆角 yin wei bu xiang da rao wo zai ji mo de qiang jiao Because I wouldn’t want to disturb it, I’m at the corner of loneliness right now Bởi vì tôi không muốn làm rộn lên, tôi đang ở góc của nỗi cô đơn 努力的對自己好 nu li de dui zi ji hao I’m putting in more effort to treat myself better Tôi đang cố gắng đối với bản thân tốt hơn nữa 你用微笑回報 ni yong wei xiao hui bao You used your smile in return Em dùng nụ cười để mà đáp lại
朋友或情人不重要 peng you huo qing ren bu zhong yao Whether we’re friends or lovers, it’s not that important Dù là bạn bè hay tình nhân cũng không quan trọng đâu 我的悲傷是如此低調 wo de bei shang shi ru ci di diao My sorrowfulness is just subdued Nỗi đau buồn của tôi đã bị dằn lại 傻子才會哭鬧 就算你發現也好 sha zi cai hui ku nao jiu suan ni fa xian ye hao A fool would just cry and make a fuss, it would be all right if you discover it Chỉ có kẻ khờ mới khóc lóc và quậy phá, dù em có phát hiện được cũng không sao 我想你一定會選擇 wo xiang ni yi ding hui xuan ze I think that you would definitely choose Tôi nghĩ rằng em nhứt định sẽ chọn lựa 假裝不知道 jia zhuang bu zhi dao To pretend not to know Giả vờ rằng mình không biết 只怕我自己的掩飾 不夠好 zhi pa wo ji zi de yan shi bu gou hao I only fear that my own concealment wasn’t good enough Tôi chỉ sợ rằng sự che dấu của mình không đủ tốt
It has been seven years now and I’m bringing this back out to discuss, nice or what? Once again, only listing fanfics that have been posted on the blog, NOT anything still in the background.
So, who’s the winner this time?
Wallace Huo – 19 (The Neurotic Collection, The Slanted Thoughts Collection, Stranded, The Business, The Dating Game Collection, and 4 one-shots) – The reigning champion. Because of The Dating Game, mostly, lol. I told you guys Wallace will leave the rest of the people in the dust with the next update. Proof, right? He would have left them in a wider gap if I hadn’t been so stuck on some of the stories.
I was actually waiting for The Dating Game to be finished posting before I update on this one. However, I think that’s it for now. Yes, I will say that it’s a good stopping point. Because somehow, I’d gone off the rails with the plot in parts 9 and 10. In fact, I tried to fix it several times but it wasn’t happening. It got worse. At least, it became so serious that it became an 8 P.M. soaps plot that I didn’t want to post. I loved it in my twisted way, that I will admit. However, I don’t think it’s considered appropriate for the current context that I tried to build. Sure, there was intensity at times, but it always came back. It did come back this time, but it no longer felt the same. In fact, I had merged part 9 in with part 8 to complete in its current state. Yes, it’s finished. However, you could see halfway through it was already heading toward a very dark place. Even darker than before. So I will stop now regarding posting it on here. I will say that I’m still working on part 9 to see if I could tweak it back to its original course. Considering how I still enjoyed it and felt like I enjoyed it more than before, I won’t post it. Unless in the future I change my mind. As of now, that’s it.
What will happen now that The Dating Game is coming to an end? I’ll probably have more time to work on the others. However, I can’t say it’s going to be soon. 2020 has in its twisted way allowed me more time to work on finishing on some fanfics. But it still brought out a very dark side to stories. I think that was what happened to The Dating Game, even if I did enjoy working on it.
I wanted to save the update regarding The Dating Game with the usual fanfic updates posts, but I thought I say something here first. Since I would be caught up in some of the real-life stuff and might not update on that one for a while.
It has been two years since I updated on this. However, I don’t think anyone cares, lol. Because I wasn’t making progress with the fanfics anyway, why bother taunting anyone, right? Because I actually made some progress of recent, so I thought it would make sense to get back into this.
The total number is still 69.
Past Fan Fic(s):
Hide & Seek – 25 Votes – It has been ten years. Can you believe it? Yes, that’s right. Ten years! It didn’t feel that way because I started it ten years ago but updated it slowly at first. Then the drag came five years ago when I was so stuck that it wasn’t even funny. At long last, I finished it. Thank you so much for those even supporting it, lol. It was a sloppy ending, sort of. But I felt because I did a good job with some of Vic and Cyndi’s other stories, I felt it was all right to end it like that. I meant, I wrote the ending ten years ago but didn’t tie it up until now. So I debated whether to change it or not. Or extending it to fifteen chapters even. But in the end, I didn’t. I felt that was enough. Not everything had to be showy. Like I said already, I felt I did a really good job for their other stories so I felt like going subtle with this one.
The Dating Game 6-7 – Yes, I left it in the background on purpose and finished it already. This was because I wrestled back and forth and kept deleting. I didn’t know what I wanted for Jacky. But finally, at long last, it’s done. No more edits regarding it. At least regarding storyline in general. If there are mistakes, I would go back and fix, of course. That’s about it. Also, it will continue posting until it’s done. To clarify, I was stuck for so long that I finally made some move late June and going into July, so managed to write some of them back to back just like that. I’m thinking of publishing two chapters per day to make up for the lack of updates for the past six years. YES, it has been six years. I was shocked when I read the time stamp on the last update too. But I guess life happened, huh?
Current Fan Fics:
Payback – 3 Votes – I have something going on for a while until I got stuck again and wanted to change my mind about the nature of the story. So yes, a little setback again.
The Business – 7 Votes – I had something going but I backspaced again so some more delay. But this was actually my first time pushing past some barriers and going all the way so I thought I reconsider about a reckless ending SO yes, that was why.
Honey In Tea – 9 Votes – The only one not moving at all so I thought I put it here. I’m not going to give up on it. But I just thought I put it on hold until after I finish with some of the other ones.
Stranded – 3 Votes – I had some notes going but I put it aside again, wondering if I should go in a certain direction with some of the plots so yes, it’s back on hold.
Upcoming Fan Fics:
The Dating Game 8 – YES, there is part 8 since I left it on a cliff hanger again. SORRY, but I just felt like ending it there. Hopefully, it won’t take another six years before I’m done with it, lol. But to give a little heads-up, I’m thinking this is heading toward a ten-part story. YES, ten. I might end it at 8 or 9 though. I don’t want to push it too much.
One-shots is now at 22. I initially wanted to post one of the stories I had in the background but I ended up scrapping it. YES, not a good thing when I’ve been lacking with updates. However, I felt it made sense since I no longer liked it. Perhaps, I’ll try to come up with something later.
So, what now? I can’t promise anything because this year has kicked up to a new level of craziness with the unpredictable. However, it’s safe to say that I’m focusing on finishing The Dating Game as soon as I can. Also, I have to get creative and stop before 2020 in the story’s timeline. Because seriously, who wants to deal with this year anyway? Even if in the fictional world. So yes, the story is going to stop at 2019–depending how much stuff I want to happen during that time. Unless, I can get away and skip the whole year with just a bunch of random vague summaries. However, I don’t think it’s plausible, because seriously, the pandemic is unknown right now for the obvious reason, so I don’t want to skip ahead, especially since this isn’t a sci-fi.
Years ago when I was still active on Winglin and other online communities, there was an explosion of different authors and readers alike coming out with websites or their own page to critique different fan fiction authors. Whether it was to help the authors improve their writing techniques or just something fun to do, it was quite an experience. I never submitted my stories to any of those websites but found them intriguing because I learned of how an author’s perspective could be versus how readers see it. It’s so obvious for everyday, published authors to go through this process. But at that time when I started posting my stories online, it was a new experience for me and it opened my eyes to some levels.
So, what’s the point of this post, right? Especially when I’ve been lagging soooo much on stories. This is an attempt to get back into it. Because the following will be an activity like the title said. I’m going to have fun and critique all the fanfictions I’ve ever written. Yes, I won’t leave anything untouched. But before I do, here’s a disclaimer for those who haven’t read the stories yet (so don’t say I didn’t warn you):
NOTE: The following contains spoilers (obviously from the title), SO if you haven’t read my stories yet, DO NOT proceed.
The beginning of the story had great potential and felt refreshing. It paved a nice and peaceful picture and a hopeful feeling because it described the two major characters’ feelings and goals in life. The humorous exchanges between several characters led readers to believe it would be a fun story. Although it had some typical formula of a small-town family with the scenic backdrop to pave the way, there was some mystery with various characters that readers could look forward to exploring. All in all, it paved a promising picture.
The problem with this story was that it was too wordy. It was one of my first attempts at writing fanfiction so it got so messy with descriptions. It didn’t take into account “show instead of telling” so it felt flaky and corny. In addition, because there was a setback with the last few chapters so it dived into the morbid side without intending to in the first place. It completely took away from the main plot and its lighthearted feeling that was established in the first place. A bad call. Like the feeling when the writers totally gave up and just wanted to end it already like how I often criticize them, lol. Also, the feeling of the celebs chosen was so random and unorganized, like lumping a bunch of people together just because. It felt like a test run.
The setting at the beach at the beginning of the story was promising and lighthearted. It presented a typical picture yet also let readers see a glimpse into each major character’s personality with a dash of humor. It seemed like they didn’t change much over the years, except for the circumstances around them. Light humor continued to occupy the scene, paving the story and pushing the major characters together–or apart–as time went by. There were some surprising details to the plot but it lacked some details here and there, not allowing the full potential of the plot to be explored.
Like some other stories, it started out describing the scenery and then introducing the characters. The weather, once again, like some other stories, gave hints to what the plot was going to be like. There was some side humor but just subtle, not too much. It was saying like the story meant business and it was no time to joke around, not really.
It was an interesting concept although it didn’t take in a lot of rules of sci-fi and went off the rails regarding technicalities. However, what made up for it was the layout of the major characters. It kept consistent and featured three female leads. What broke the rule for the third one was leading into a happier, hopeful ending than was predicted. It also gave more character and depth to one of the so-called villains and even allowed for that person to redeem himself and had a start over.
This was a typical setup of two pairings that were living on the opposite side of society. They met and interacted and somehow became entangled in a complex scheme. It provided a sense of mystery to the overall story and made the readers want to know what was to come and where the story was heading toward. The ending was a bit of an unknown, especially after the intense confrontations between two of the major characters and how it went down. However, it proved to be going on a typical route with allowing all problems to be resolved in a more favorable manner.
This story attempted to mock the life of gangsters and how it was supposed to be yet failed because, in the end, it was equally cliche and was corny in a sense of allowing some bizarre details to come into play. Although having the theme of gang-related activities as the backdrop for the plot, it failed to achieve its intended effect because of the halfway compromise of the mood as an overall. Sometimes, it edged toward the side of intensity or darkness that could push past the barriers of safety but it was shy of making it into something much more.
The story started out really random, bordering childishness because of the constant fights between two of the major characters. However, it evolved into a sadder story because of what happened at the end. Although it attempted to resurrect the atmosphere with some side humor, the plot never recovered with the happiness felt at the beginning of the story. It was later explained in the second part why it was so and eventually leading the plot into a darker path than was originally intended to–or so it seemed when compared to the beginning of the first part. What the plot lacked severely was the explanation and more details into a certain mysterious organization that impacted some characters’ lives so many years and ongoing. Some of the undertones provided a hint about how they were a big deal and were not to be messed with. Yet it failed to back up the claim as the story went along and eventually wrapped up. It also never explained why Tammy’s character had so much impact on what Wallace’s life was going to be and yet left him alone after he had apparently restored his memories. Or was it because it was to emphasize how scary he was if he returned to his past self? Or because the organization didn’t care how things turned out and that it was only important they kept everything a secret? Some things were never answered.
This was a fun read, at least at the beginning. Sure, there were childish humor and constant competition between the two siblings–or so readers thought as it was with typical siblings rivalry. However, it took a dark turn, killing a major character unnecessarily. Was that an attempt to be overdramatic? Or was it because the writer just decided to give up and end it that way?
The story seemed really random but that wasn’t a bad thing. It hinted potential with so many major characters involved and how each was at a different point in their lives. It was fascinating to see how they all met and would become important–one way or another–in each other’s lives. The story shifted between humor and intensity and back again. Yet always managed to push the plot forward, introducing new characters or circumstances into their lives and how they would react to those situations.
Although the cast was so extended that it provided an outlet for many story arches yet because it was so crowded that it didn’t allow for a focus on some characters. Also, some of the characters had suffered from the inconsistency of personality, except for the main characters. It also created an unrealistic atmosphere with so many of their gatherings and their strong bonds over the years. It could be both good and bad but mostly it was unrealistic. Not to mention how ridiculously meddlesome most of them were of one another’s lives. The occasional stalking of various parties was equally bizarre.
The first scene already gave a snapshot of what the story was going to be about and how the dark mood predicted the inevitable ending for some characters. The weather foreshadowed a lot of the scenes that were to come for the story. The layout wasn’t bad yet the constant side randomness and humor involving the characters downplayed the overall theme for the majority of the story. It was actually character-based and not plot-based like it should have been. The lack of information on both gang’s background made it hard to relate and didn’t allow for more interest toward that side of the story. It became a wannabe gangster story because it didn’t say how or why they were fighting or fleeing for their lives. It was only covered briefly at the beginning of how both sides had been fighting since forever yet never revealed the real reason why.
The storytelling style was strange yet intriguing. It made readers want to read more and find out what was going on and what was the deal with these characters. Or if they could get out from the current prison they were in. However, there were only glimpses here and there and some side details of the characters. They could have been extended to a much more complex story.
This story started out introducing the main characters right away and hinted at their established relationship and how it would come into play later on. The story began lighthearted with some side humor and then took a more serious turn as the characters acknowledge much more complex issues surrounding their lives. In some sense, the story allowed the characters to face reality with a hard punch. But in other sense, it felt a little dramatic and forced. Yet the story was still written a dialed down sort of way, like some subtlety of daily life happenings that could edge toward blandness but jumped back with a kick to tell us that reality will strike again. It was a mixture of complexity and simplicity. It had this balance and one tip of the scale would lead the story spiraling away.
The story introduced some promising aspects, such as the story being told from the main character’s point of view. There were also inspirational quotes involved. So that sort of gave a feeling of a legit book. However, it took a shaky turn and ended up being a typical high school, mean girl type of war. There were some interesting ideas but the execution was terrible and the plot dull. If at all, that was.
Extremely disappointing because it seemed like an attempt to crank out something that involved the two main characters. It seemed like an unfinished story and didn’t involve a lot of details. It would have been better to wait for some sort of idea to come forth before continuing with the story. It should have been a one-shot, then it would make more sense.
So, aside from being random for this post, what’s the point here? Of all the stories I’ve written, I only liked True Friendship. Yes, that sad. I took it slow and made it through without feeling like I needed to rush anything or wanted to write to please readers. It wasn’t like I didn’t add in random conversations or some bizarre humor. The story had both. But what was different was how the two main characters didn’t end up together but also didn’t downplay their relationship throughout. It acknowledged some of the more realistic aspects of life, even if it didn’t allow for the story to cover all. I did get stuck on it at one time but the time spent thinking about the plot as an overall and side brainstorming, it had allowed me to change the ending for the better, at least to me.
I also realized some things about my writing styles. Well, I already realized it for a while now but here’s an outright confession, lol. Some characters, especially the main ones, tend to fall into one formula. So I think that’s something to take into account to try to make it different in the future. Or least mix it up a bit.
If anyone noticed, I think I got influenced by Gu Long and Jin Yong at times, lol. No jokes. Sad, but I read those two a lot so I got influenced, especially with describing sceneries and stuff. But of course, I couldn’t go to their level. Not yet. The reason I said “not yet” is because I at least want to reserve some hope that one day I could reach another level. Or like find my own styles. For now, just recognizing the flaws is enough.
So that’s the fun post. More to come in the future, hopefully.
NOTE: This post will be updated from time to write as I add more stories to my blog or finish the current ones.
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